Comment #1
(Posted by Lindsay) Rating
This is great so far. I'd add a bit more description and less dialogue though. Meaning, you don't have to use the dialogue as description every time. Imagery is really nice though and could be enhanced by more detail. :) Nice work.
Comment #2
(Posted by h) Rating
What the heck? "Oh, look. Some ropes. Let's look at them, and not use them for anything." I don't get it.
Comment #3
(Posted by an unknown user) Rating
This story is incomplete there are at least 2 additional pages...
Comment #4
(Posted by wal) Rating
Finished too soon!!
